I would also go for lustrousonion's sentence, as it sounds cleaner. The original sentence, "Abigail, who was once my friend, gave me good advice,...
Thanks everyone! @Gawler: I don't actually live in Hawaii, I just like saying "aloha" as it sounds better than hi or hello.
Why the entity is only active every 50 years? Here are a few possible reasons: -the entity wakes up every 50 years, and has to be put to sleep...
Alright, thanks everyone! I pretty much have a decent setting now, combined a few ideas from here.
Just a whole lot of foreshadowing elements, I guess. Perhaps the protagonist keeps hearing about this upcoming character, and it isn't until that...
I actually really like stories where the MC is driven by revenge or redemption. I don't mind the cliche of all of it, because it's fun when a...
I've noticed a few problems like this in my writing, absolutely true. Sometimes, some of my characters completely change. Though it's usually...
Personally, I would simply reduce the characters down to just one or two MAIN characters. As AMP said, some characters would need to fall into the...
Here's the basic plot: The human rebellion is giving way to the overpowered ghosts. The humans have no tools whatsoever to stop the undying ghosts...
Hmm....I sort of like the characters who basically know everything and act cool. It pains me to see characters who do dumb things for "heroism." I...
Alright, I'll try and answer the questions, I don't really feel like quoting though. 1) What are a ghosts' needs? A: A ghost doesn't really "need"...
Basically, humans would have found a way to connect the living with the dead, kind of like a portal. The spirits, however, would of course...
Basically, the human race is near extinction - not to zombies, aliens, or robots, but to ghosts. Ghosts basically rule the world now. Here's a...
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