If you dont want to go down the machine or lighting route then the only options i see are either 1. destructive - torture, military etc 2....
End of life as we know it, all that gay sounding stuff. o_O
I don't usually equate a free spirited person, someone who is desirable and fleeting as a "mean bitch" and I cant imagine why anyone would assume...
I think maybe everyone is looking into the hill thing a bit much, it could be explained in many ways, he could have another job for example, he...
You read stories and sometimes you think of things you'd change, you'd add or take away. Those are your preferences. I haven't found a book that...
I have to agree with most of what @Shadowfax has said there, the hill thing stood out to me much more than the rest I must admit but it could be...
I feel like this type of character is quite common, although I cant for the life of me remember which characters! There should be plenty of...
The only thing I can think of is showing the struggles you mentioned, the underwhelming or over the top help, showing the impact her mutism has on...
I would run the story by folks, see if they can get to grips with it first time. I hate having to re-read something because it was too complicated...
I agree, quite the exaggeration there.
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