"The runners, each of them reputed to be one of the fastest in the world, moved to their starting blocks." Is this correct? I feel like "one" is...
Okay, I can see what you mean -- If he were saying, "Whew, if that hadn't worked, I would have given up", that would be different. But in this...
I was quibbling with "If this hadn't worked", not "would have given up".
That isn't correct for the sense of the sentence. It would be correct if the novel were written in the narrator's past (i.e. "I'm telling you a...
In the present tense, you might say, "If this doesn't work, I give up." How would you write that in the past tense? "If this didn't work, I gave...
I don't think so, that doesn't sound right.
In general, or in this case? I do like to use italics for internal monologue. e.g., Susan eyed the man. She thought he wasn't very charming,...
What do you mean, not the best way to deal with it? (Don't worry about the exclamation, this is an example sentence. There's actually about a...
This sort of thing really varies by publisher. All the options are correct, it's just a matter of style. I would tend to prefer single quotes to...
I'm not sure I'm doing this right. I want to write about what a character intends to do: "Susan just had to get out and move around, even if it...
Separate names with a comma.