I'm afraid there has been some misunderstanding. The part in quotation marks is just a group of examples taken out of my story, plus a comment of...
I did edit it some 20 times; if there was anything I didn't like I'm sure I would have changed it, so you could say that was by intent, in some...
Thanks for the encouraging words :)
Thank you very much for this detailed answer. It helped me to understand the problem better.
Hi A few days ago I posted a story of mine for feedback on reddit. The most prevailing thought seemed to be that I’m using some unusual, strange,...
Separate names with a comma.