You use small staccato sentence structures a lot. Try visualising the scene, and make a heirachy of what's most important, for example, in this...
Hm, to be honest this seems more like a novel outline than a short story. It's a good concept though, there's a lot of exploring you could do to...
I have the same problem, I almost always write female characters, I identify with them best. The thing is the usually have a lot of masculine...
I tend to drop a lot of projects too. As for killing off characters, why not try setting up writing exercises for yourself that specifically...
I'm in the manawatu. I was in christchurch almost a year ago, it's a surprisingly charming city, despite not being overly famous for anything.
*waves* I try to keep hold of simple pleasures, being old doesn't mean letting go of childhood and such like. Aaaah, an american in NZ. We...
I think it would have a number of different effects. 1. Wisdom, acceptance, some sense of a greater purpose in life 2. Intense boredom and...
This may or may not be helpful, but I was reading a guide on designing a character for comics, as in sketching up character sheets. What this...
Ello *waves* I'm new too, maybe we can secretly plot to take over the world together.
Hiya *waves* New here and whatnot, I'm from New Zealand, for those of you unfamiliar with it, it's where they filmed lord of the rings, the...
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