You what is the best thing to do in that situation? Cut out those dialogue tags. "What are you doing?" she asked. "What are you doing?" She...
It's like the word "mum." Mum has to be capitalised if it's by itself. But when you say MY mum, it has to be a lowercase. You know? So, if...
I hate... These "..." things. Annoying. Dialogue tags --you don't need them. Semi column used incorrectly. Too little commas. Too many...
Well, I always write is as: eight-thirty a.m. <--- Don't forget those dots in between. But that's just me, because I have numerals that...
Separate names with a comma.