1. Timothy X

    Timothy X New Member

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    Rate my summary from 1 to 10

    Discussion in 'Plot Development' started by Timothy X, Mar 4, 2017.

    I've been working on a fiction novel (project TX) aimed towards the preteen/teen crowd. This is a one sentence summary of it:

    A group of genetically modified emissaries are sent back in time to prevent humanity's annihilation, only to age back as children and loose fragments of their memories.

    I don't have feelings so you can use your up-most honest opinions on it. Is it OK? Does it sound like something that might interest you? Does it sound familiar? Or does it sound like I just retyped a book that already exists? I personally think it doesn't sound original enough. I can give more info if you ask.
     
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    Thinking back to when I was about 12 years old, this would definitely have interested me. GenMod, time-travel and the destruction of humanity are topics that pre-teens/teens can find just as interesting as adults. They shouldn't be underestimated, especially when it comes to their imagination. The fact that the MC's are now children would also speak to a pre-teen crowd, but be sure to stay in the roles of children. I wouldn't worry about originality here. Besides the fact that every story has already been done regardless of its contents, I think the wording is pretty tight. You might want to simplify it a bit though. "Genetically modified emissaries" and "humanity's annihilation" aren't words I'd expect in a pre-teen story. "Destruction of mankind" might be a better wording here. That could just be me though.
     
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    It's a tiny bit short. It doesn't really make sense that they go back as children.... does some sort of accident happen?
    "Only to go back as children." Is extremely vague, but maybe you are just trying not to expose too much of the plot?
    Maybe "Because of a freak accident, they go back as children."
     
  4. Timothy X

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    Actually, that's the exact reason why they came back as kids. I am still working on how that will happen, though.
     
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    I was fine till I got to 'age back.' That doesn't quite make sense to me. Do you mean they return to the present as children? If so, that might be a clearer way to say it.

    Am I getting the picture correctly here?

     
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    I think I should reword it before the people get the wrong picture. Due to a malfunction time takes affect on them and they aged back as children when they went back in time. They were adults when they left their present time.
     

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