Favorite quote from your main character

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  1. LostThePlot

    LostThePlot Naysmith Contributor

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    Someone asked to read one of my old books and I just quickly ran my eye through it again and found this gem:

    Sausage he could manage but voyeurism was a step too far.

    The context is all the characters are cult members and the MC is the sixteen year old son of the cult's leader who takes over the church when his father dies. Now in charge he takes the cult camping and they stay on a camp site in the Lake District, and obviously he encounters many new things. The woman who raised him has to explain them to this sheltered, babied kid who has no idea how the real world works. This includes informing him that in the real world they have separate showers for men and women and the girls will be upset if he goes in the wrong one, a concept that he struggles to grasp because he's showered with her since he was five. She struggles for a moment and finally decides he doesn't need to know exactly what people will think he is doing in the women's showers and just tells him that it's the rules and leaves it at that.
     
  2. The Scarred Servant

    The Scarred Servant Member

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    Just found a new one. When my main characters hide inside a portable toilet...

    "So, let's assess the situation... There are a multitude of inbred, funky fish freaks with teeth as sharp as their chins out to kill us... And we are literally in deep shit"
     
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  3. Cave Troll

    Cave Troll It's Coffee O'clock everywhere. Contributor

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    “Are you telling me, you have not had sex. Like at all,” the little lizard probes further,” How does a pretty thing like you, stay a virgin?”

    “Correct, I am as you call it a virgin,” I affirm to her,” I have been able to keep myself as such due to the fact that I have never been attracted to another. And I have never really felt the need to find out, until recently. So I manage my desire myself.”
     
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    Malisky Malkatorean Contributor

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    "I wish I won't have to kill you", Zhu Yun said arrogantly as he measured his opponent that had turned out trickier than expected.

    "Wish granted your highness", Ching Kuai responded deceitfully as he slowly sheathed his sword and bowed down deeply, without losing eye contact whatsoever. "Now, you don't have to kill me. I'll be on my way then." He said and turned to leave carefree, like this encounter had never happened; but acting quirky could only gain him a couple of steps away from this undesired rivalry before he could hear a long, pissed off " Jiiiin" followed by accelerating steps heading his way.
     
  5. UnderTheMoon

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    I love that. On the topic of weird virginity discussions...


    “As soon as we got into the room he pushed me up against the door. He kissed me, then worked his way down to my neck. That’s when he tore my throat in half.” said Nathan.

    “So…the last person you kissed was Cain, and you’ve never actually done it?”

    “No. Shut up.”
     
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  6. AustinFrom1995

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    Not my favorite, but I did find it kinda funny:

    "Did you see me back there, I was all like "pew pew pew" and "Eat lead suckers!", those guys didn't stand a chance!" Kayla said, loading another clip into her rifle. "I mean really, what would you do without me?" Zaphron looked back at her from the now-descended landing ramp of the Emerald Angel, and even through the interpreter in her ear, Kayla could still make out the subtle sarcasm as he said "Would you really want me to answer that?"
     
  7. M∅VEMNT

    M∅VEMNT New Member

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    "Vince be careful of your eye." Jamie said.
    "I'm fine, focus on the pieces of shit with the key to total domination!" I said.

    My MC has an ability in his eyes that lets him predict movements and overuse of his power can make him blind.
     
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  8. rktho

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    I was just inspired to put a passage about two characters, Daktarash and Kharda. Dak is paying off a debt to Kharda, remarking on his thrawn habits such as erotic drug use. Daktarash tries to sell Kharda a large gem, but Kharda sees it has been scratched and asks how Daktarash could mar a jade so. At any rate, Kharda intends to betray him in return for much profit, and he promptly reveals that he has sold him out to the emperor who's out for his blood. Daktarash angrily responds to the callous throwing away of years of business partnership with, "Suck your talon, Khard."

    It'd probably be a little Forced though.
     
  9. Cave Troll

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    “Fucking coward,” I bite through my teeth, no longer able to hold in my building rage.

    “The Human and the Uldivarion? Why yes they are, but not her,” General Flurren remarks absentmindedly.

    “Not them, you arrogant cock cozy. You,” I retort back at her in a low and loud guttural growl.

    “That was a disrespectful thing to say to a lady,” a new feminine voice says a little too calmly off to my right.
     
  10. Mumble Bee

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    Antag - "I respect you nearly as much as I hate you."

    MC - "You hate me?"

    Antag - "No."
     
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    "Many dream of becoming a hero, but in war, you cannot become a hero without also becoming a villain in someone else's eyes."

    "I am but the blade, the crown leads and the scales keep us both in balance."
     
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    It was then that I caught a crumpled up wad of paper hit my cargo jacket and then roll off onto the floor.


    “What the f@$k is that!” Renee shouted at me.



    “Considering I don’t know what that is you’re talking about, I am going to assume you’re talking about the piece of paper thrown at me. So that is a crumbled up piece of paper,” I responded.

    [I in this case is Damian. He's my smart ass and I found this particular line extra funny]
     
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    I like it.:D
     
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    Seraph751 If I fell down the rabbit hole... Contributor

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    "Wake me up from the dream that is your delusion for I would rather have the nightmare that is me reality."
    -Red
     
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    Daktarash: I imagined speaking with a dangerous terrorist to be less... depressing.
     
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    S A Lee Contributor Contributor

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    Female Lead*: Um... your father told me... about what happened to your mother... about how you destroyed everything that her killer stood for. I may never know what it is to feel revenge, but I don't hold what you did against you.
    Dragomir: Honestly, it was about more than revenge for me. Every person I killed that night would have gone to kill people for nothing other than what they were, regardless of whether or not they acted on their abilities. If it prevents other kids on our side burning with the hatred that I endured for 12 years, I'll become a monster that even monsters dread.

    (*I've previously named her here as Lily, but several plot points are going through an overhaul right now and her name is subject to change.)
     
  17. Night Herald

    Night Herald The Fool Contributor

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    “I promise you'll be sorry when you find my bones in the morning."

    “And I promise not to cook a nice broth on them. Goodbye.”
     
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    “You honestly do not believe someone would sell us out?” Gurdur ask Signore.


    “Well, what other idea do you have? The enemy stumbled upon one of our hideouts while having a peaceful picnic,” Signore experates.
     
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    Arin looks at himelf in the mirror, I can't kill myself, I'm too handsome for that.
    (I don't know if this is actually what he says to the mirror, but it's my current line. The context is that Arin has to kill himself in order to save someone, but he's looking in the mirror of vanity, which as it's name suggests, makes you extremely vain.)
     
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    And here I thought a man killed himself in a bathroom.
    (Less messy when it comes to clean up.) :p
     
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    "Are all vampires good-looking?"
    "Well, let's just say we don't like fatty food..."
     
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    A collection of curses Sygnor is slowly collecting

    “Ancestors tits!” He throws his hands in the air before slamming the chair back into a tucked position at the table’s width “Why do I even bother with you sometimes. Honestly.” He storms out of the chamber.

    "Ancestors can kiss my ass cheeks if they have a problem with it"

    “Bloody looking for you and your band of,” what do I call them, misfits, black sheeps, “misfitted black sheeps.”
     
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  23. Alistair Black

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    From y MC to the mafia boss:

    "No, I think you got here by being the biggest prick in the room."
     
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    Another haunting one from Ragnar, when he's talking to Emily while he's sleepwalking:

    "I didn't mean to leave you to die. I meant to come back."
     
  25. Laurus

    Laurus Disappointed Idealist Contributor

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    "I have no heartbreaks to speak of, no fantastic tales of magical places with interesting people. My pain deserves no sympathy and my victories deserve no praise. I'm a middle-of-the-road man of mediocrity because I was smart enough to avoid the dumb shit, and scared enough to avoid the fun shit." I took one last draw of my cigarette and dropped it into the can, sighing out the last of the smoke. "I never thought I'd envy the stupid."
     

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