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Discussion in 'Plot Development' started by Vianca, Jun 28, 2017.

  1. Tophert79

    Tophert79 Banned

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    Absolutely. I can just imagine two agents making a bet, obviously drunk at the time, one of the agent goes, "OK. I'll trawl the internet and find the worst written fan-fiction story that I can, and I bet that I can make it into one of the best selling books of all time!", "Fine. I'll take that bet!" says the second agent. It was probably a £/$1 bet.

    lol. I bet the trees gave the least wooden performance.
     
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  2. Vianca

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    Well, instead of the woman having to find this kind of outlet i wouldn't mind a few novels where the woman was the dominant and the male her scared little puppy. Talk about role changer! Now I would read that. Lol
     
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    I think you've happened upon your next project. ;)

    If you need a co-writer then PM me. :p There's a thought, you could write for the woman and I could write for the man. I must warn you, though, there is no way that I'd let him be the submissive. :p
     
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    haha, good idea. But this kind of projects aren't my style. I lose focus quickly and leave them incomplete. I tried once.

    didn't work out.

    But hey. thanks for the offer. I'll let you know if I ever revisit that train of though... ;)
     
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    There is no shame in submission to a woman. ;)

    Only in pride, does one think such things.
     
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    To the original question that's how I do my sex scenes if I need them. I use taste, thoughts, and feelings. Rather than the act itself. Because to me those are more important in sex scenes then the let's face it explicit stuff.
     
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    This is actually very good advice. You mean that you would describe what you would feel in that situation. As your MC?
     
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    Yes. Because that's what sex is. I don't know anyone in the world, who sits there and thinks about what someone is physically doing to you besides a free brief moments that capture the moment.

    "I feel electric as he touches my bare arm, my heart is racing as he pulls back the strap of my tank top. He leans in for a kiss, I am intoxicated by his smell of heavy cologne and in this moment everything feels all right" <----apparently I am not so good at portraying a woman's point of view, but the point is there. Its about Sensations. Not the Physical actions. Its about the Emotions. And the Swell of Sensations.
     
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    Yeah, bit cheesy lol.

    but you have a point. I think a combination of both Physical and Emotion description would do it justice. Because the reader could transport themselves to that exact moment. i mean.

    "She sat on top of me, her whole weight rested on my thighs. Her breathing was heavy and deep. I caressed her lower back with my finger tips, almost feather like, and she softly moaned right into my ear. her hot breath brushed my neck finding its way to my ear. the soothing blows made my body shivered. caressing her arms I noticed her goose bumps were showing, which meant she was enjoying this as much as me. she moaned and grabbed the back of my head firmly. She parted from me, looked at me and smile. I could see the pleasure in her features." Something like this I don't know.

    As you can see I am NOT an expert. pft still kind of finding my niche.
     
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    I write in first person and it was on top of my head. lol. I need a bit more emotion instead of conjuring it from the air, that's my bad and my fail as a writer sometimes. Got to know the characters to be able to put into words the mood love making. lol
     
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    Yeah, I sometimes forget too. And start typing like a maniac to when I re-read I find the errors and the garbage I wrote:p

    Also, do you think that paragraph is well written or does it need something else?
     
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    Same. But if nothing else, going by the "50 Shades" debacle, it shows that no matter how gross you are, no matter how illiterate, etc, you can still make it in this business. Yes, you may have to sell your soul to the Devil, which I'm almost certain that the "author" of those books done, but what's a soul between friends. :p

    You lose focus? Eh, I'm a gentleman, I'm not even going to ask what that means. ;)

    You're welcome, and I'll hold you to that. :)
     
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    Yikes!

    Can't imagine it, I think my ego would get in the way. Thankfully. :p
     
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    hahaha, NOT what i meant. hahaha
     

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