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    Feedback on my summary wanted

    Discussion in 'Plot Development' started by Gladiolus83, Feb 26, 2020.

    So, regarding my rewrite project I have posted about previously I have now found my solution and is very interested in hearing whether it sounds interesting and such, or not.


    Haruka is studying to be an archeologist. On the worksite he one day finds a pendant, which looks like a silver-phoenix embracing a ruby-orb. The necklace turns out to be magical and Haruka finds himself transported to a world much unlike his own, and with a strange mark on his hand.

    There he meets a man his own age named Ai Hisakino, although he prefers to be called Fuu. From him Haruka learn that the one wearing the mark is chosen by Suzaku to be his companion and source of nourishment.

    Suzaku along with his brothers Seiryuu, Byakko and Genbu are gods who for generations have ruled and protected the humans. The gods feed on the life force of humans, although only Suzaku has a specific person as a donor, his brothers pick new ones among the volunteers every time. Fuu is revealed to also be the Chosen of Suzaku. As such he is weary of Haruka, fearing that this stranger will be a rival for Suzaku’s attention. Over time they grow closer and closer however.

    The gods do not see eye to eye that much and very soon Haruka finds himself in the middle of war between Suzaku on one side and his three brothers on the other. The war, or game as all four gods tend to call it, is eventually cut short. The four demon kings Qinglong, Zhuque, Baihu and Xuanwu have started to act.

    Well, they started popping up here and there earlier, but it is during the war they really start to make their move. Suzaku realizes that he cannot handle them on his own and as he kowtows to his brothers (which they comment on because it is so unlike him) he manages to gain their aid.

    The gods and demon kings face of a couple of times until the demons challenges the gods to a final winner takes all match. The gods have come to realize however that all the demons want is to be able to leave the shadows and end the oppression they have been under by the humans. A peace treaty is formed and both humans and demons try to live in harmony.

    Haruka is returned home. During his stay in the other world however his and Fuu’s friendship have turned into love. But because of Fuu’s position as Chosen there seemed to be no hope for a relationship. Suzaku however realizes that he has lost his Chosen’s devotion, he frees Fuu from this oath of servitude and send him to be reborn in Haruka’s world. And a few days after his return Haruka meet Mahou, Fuu’s reborn self. Mahou had regained his memories from his other life a few years prior and been searching for Haruka since then. The story end with the couple kissing.
     

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