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    Title for this fic?

    Discussion in 'Science Fiction' started by rktho, Apr 20, 2020.

    So I’ve got this short fan fic set in the Star Wars universe. It takes place on a jungle planet during Revenge of the Sith. A Jedi wakes up alone in the forest with an ache in the back of her head, having fallen from her ship and been left for dead. Her comlink isn’t working so she goes to the command post to let her clone troopers know she’s alive only to overhear them discussing killing her, and realizes she’s been inexplicably betrayed. (Those familiar with Star Wars will remember Order 66, the brain trigger that turned the clones on the Jedi, leading to the genocide that nearly wiped them out.) The clones have subjugated the village they were supposed to liberate from Separatist control. The a Jedi finds a young boy of ten or twelve or so and senses his attunement to the Force. He’s psychometric, meaning he sees visions when he touches things. (Rey displayed this ability in The Force Awakens.) The Jedi is missing her lightsaber and enlists the boy’s help to get it back from the clones, who he saw carrying it. The Jedi snoops around the command post and finds a corpse identical to her with a blaster shot in the back of her head. The kid finds the lightsaber and wields it against the clones, using the Force to escape. He meets up with the Jedi and tries to give her lightsaber back, but she tells him to keep it, that he needs it more than she does. As she begins to fade away, she tells him if there are any Jedi left, the Force will guide him to them so he can be trained. With that parting reassurance, the boy is left alone with the weapon and blessing of a Jedi and the promise that the Force will always be with him.

    Anyway, I need a title for this sucker. "The Sixty-Sixth Sense" is the first one that popped into my head, but if you get the reference it spoils the twist.
     
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    Wait, why does the Jedi die?
     
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    Because her clone troopers shot her. That's what Order 66 is.
     
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    I understand that, but I was confused by this line in your synopsis:
    Who's snooping, the kid or the Jedi?
     
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    She finds her own corpse and realizes she's dead, and that she's supposed to pass the torch, which is why the Force guided her to find this Force-sensitive kid. So when the kid finds the lightsaber, she tells him to keep it.
     
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    I know this isn't the purpose of your thread, but how does that work? Is there some Force thing where she doesn't realize she's a ghost? Or an alternate timeline? I've never read a Star Wars story like that before. I'm just curious, not intending this as a criticism.
     
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    Yeah, she doesn't realize she's a ghost. My interpretation is that she's a Force vision created to guide the kid to find her saber, and that the POV scenes of her are for the audience's benefit and might not actually be real.
     
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    Touching Smoke-

    He's psychometric so he can see things by touching an object. She is a ghost, something that should be immaterial like smoke. He can't touch her as she is immaterial but she still gives him something-a path.
     
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    hello

    I think it is generally accepted that Star Wars is fantasy, not science fiction - so maybe you should post this query to the fantasists who are more likely to be familiar with the concepts you describe - and so, might have a better idea for the title.

    my tuppence worth - something with the name of the planet in it?
     
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    Hmm, I wonder what order 65 was like . . . hahaha xD I love sci fi
     
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    Order 65 was the order to take out the Chancellor, ironically enough. If the Senate had determined Palpatine had become a threat to the Republic, they could have had the clones execute him with extreme prejudice. Order 65 was the contingency order the clones should have been given. But nobody except the Jedi suspected Palpatine was so corrupt it warranted such drastic action— and even the Jedi did not confront the Chancellor with the intention to kill; arrest and senatorial trial was their first priority. If the Senate had seen Palpatine for what he really was, the clones would have executed Order 65. In Legends, anyway. The other clone protocols haven't been canonized.
     
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