As I am editing a work of mine, sometimes I come across sentences that I can't decide what to do with. Sometimes I know what is wrong, or I just know that >something< is wrong, but not what to do. I would highly appreciate it if any of you could help me: A tanned arm and a squirm from its owner were the only indications that there was a man under the blanket and that he was alive. --- Should there be any extra punctuation in this sentence anywhere? I feel that there should be a comma, but I’m not sure where. There was a series of groans, and Mount Saint Kelly toppled as she turned on her side. --- Should it be ‘was’ or ‘were’ a series of groans. It’s the whole singular/plural thing I’m having a problem with. “What do you mean, ‘What’s a neutral zone?’?” --- Should it have both of those question marks? Or does one have to go? If so, which one? Somehow, Kelly was ripped from his grasp and dragged off somewhere, as strange hands roamed over him, sizing him up like a piece of meat. --- Comma before ‘as’ -> it troubles me. Should it be gone? He couldn’t fault her for that, but just because she said things would be one way, it didn’t mean Mel had to blindly go along with it. --- The ‘it’. It makes the sentence sound funny. Should I take it out, but keep that comma? As in, “…way, didn’t mean...” Or does the comma go, too? * Thanks so much!