can someone tell me how i can make my story better and tell me what mistake im doing and errors im doing wrong im new here and new to writing story's for class assignments im in high school im a sophomore plz tell me where to put commas and insert periods in the right places writing has never been really my thing My mother is a caring indiviual.She helps everyone in my family from anything personal to business issues.My mother is very Intelligent she has a masters degree in counseling and now is currently working on her doctorate.She helps me with my homework even though math was her weak point in school My mother helps me well with projects I have to say without her love and caring about me i would not be half as brillaint as I am without her.My mother is a proud woman she stands for what she belives in I think that is were i get my pride,courage and bravery. I Remember when my mother made pancakes for me.I woke up one morning i perceived the scent of fresh,buttery,round and fluffy pancakes.I rushed out of bed and Jetted into the kitchen to see my mother fliping the roung,fluffy and golden pancakes.When they were done I was smiling from ear to ear.when my mother was done I devoured the pancakes with a passion the were great and I kissed her on the cheek and went back to bed agter my Great meal. My conclusion is that my mother is caring loving and inspiring to me. my mother is the best mother I can ever have In this world. I know i am blessed to have her I also know there are kids and teens around the world that wish they could have a mother like mine so I am not arrogant or ungrateful of what she those for me and teachs me. my mother is one of the most strongest most couragist woman i have ever met in my life.
If you gain improvements from comments on this site, is it still YOUR work? No. Your teacher needs to see your actual work in order to best know how to direct her/his lessons and advice. Besides, it is unethical to turn in "homework" that was done, or improved, by others. As far as commas, here is an excellent site where you can study the use of commas: [Link Removed] ~Raven.
