Okay guys! This is my first like, official post here regarding my writing. There has been a novel in the works for over 8 years now. I made almost all of my titles and stories when I was super young and now I'm a failing adult who has no idea what he's doing. I've gotten up to chapter 8 in my original draft bUT i scrapped the whole thing because it was not going the way I intended. Basically, the synopsis (am I using that word right?) is this: Delilah Weylin is a seemingly fine, regular girl. Normal things happen, she has social issues, she's a little on the quiet side and such... The only thing really off about her is she hears a voice in her head - THE Voice. That's all she knows it as. This Voice has followed her around her whole life and the only people who know about it is her parents. It told her constantly how important she was. How powerful she was. How incredible she was. Really tried to inflate her ego, make her like it. Her parents thought. Wow. That's- Strange! My daughter is hearing voices, trying to be supportive, wondering if it was a disorder... They tried getting help for her, but before anything could really happen.... Her parents died in a freak fire accident and all evidence pointed to Delilah. Thing is, she has no recollection of anything ever happening! So now she lives with her cousin Toby, the only person who really accepts her and tries to understand her. He was the fire fighter who pulled her out of the house. He has no reason to believe it was her. Years go by. The Voice shows up every now and then. But one thing leads to another, and the Voice now directs Delilah where it wants her to go. The strange identity brings her to a place that only she knows where it is. It's basically a portal to a pocket dimension, which is connected to all other dimensions. The Voice has a play in everything and is trying to get as much power from the people who enter as possible. Delilah's goal is to find out WHY the Voice thought she was 'important' enough to be in this realm, and find the actual happenings that lead to her parents death. This post is already all over the place, but that's like the overview a;lskdfja;slkj im DYING OVER HERE,,, Through the story Delilah will meet her supporting cast members, and there is a technical love interest but Delilah is Aromantic/Asexual. It's a humor/young adult/fantasy novel. There will be death from a lot of things. I just want to have a better grasp as to why the Voice wants Delilah and why the Voice wants to honestly torture her. I think I have a lot of potential here, but I just need to round it out a bit more. SO MY QUESTION(s) ARE: - If this is a pocket realm, should she be stuck in it, or be free to go back and forth? - I really like Toby as a character! How can I include him more in the story? - Delilah has a different way of approaching things. She's SUPER hard headed and timid at the same time???? How to balance issues from social trauma plus personality traits? - I DO NOT want to just portrait this as a typical 'mental health' situation. I know how this shit is and how villifying it is to people with ACTUAL DISORDERS. It's so frustrating trying to balance and not stab myself in the foot with this!!!! What are your thoughts? - is there anything you want to know about the characters Thank you so much for reading a;sldfja i hOPE THIS MAKES SENSE!!!!!!!!