I wrote a short story (1,165 words) and I've been editing the crap out of it. I haven't edited so much before and I'm still revising it. I'm thinking of posting it on the writing workshop forum, but I feel like I'm asking too much. I know I have to read more for some things like reference, but I'm going to research some books on the narration I used(3rd person omniscient). I would like to see how well I did it without for right now. I feel like I'm asking Beta reader questions, or something a editor will look for. Also, do I even need to ask these questions? I know people go critique and maybe look over these sort of things, but since I'm looking for something specific, is it okay? How is the narration? Is there anyway for it to improve while still keeping the narrator's "presence"? Am I showing too much? Are there some things I should tell? How is my way of "showing?" Can you tell the character's personality? Can you feel their emotions? Is this story immersive? Is it choppy? Is there any way to make it less choppy?