I was hoping to get some constructive criticism for the introduction to my book. i have been outlining for 3 months and have finally jumped in and sadly i feel as though i may be getting to descriptive already. any pointers would be awesome. The smell of sulfur. that was the first thing to hit me when the airlock opened. The smell of sulfur and the multi-colored plasma screaming at near sonic speeds. back and forth. The first war since the terraforming of the solar system and I was met with the smell of the primitive weapons the ancients used. We were there to protect the treaty, the one document that held all peace together, the one that that bound mankind into one being and we , the enforcers had arrived to quell the rebellion. The great Marines of the twin system the military arm of the Agents of Zion we the Peacekeepers.