The passages related to my question will be followed by a *. Kyle was about to reply when he felt a hand on his shoulder. "Accusing me of what?" He froze. No... this wasn't possible! Lynn was supposed to be out recording a song. She entered the house and got behind him soundlessly too... * Such a frightening woman! * These parts feel like we're directly in the character's head, which is what I wanted. I'm really not sure if it's correct for a third person narrative though, is it?