I suffer from a frightful case self-indulgence, and thus my characters all come out ridiculously cliché. I try to lessen this as I work with them, but I still have doubts, so here's a quick summary of my mains. The first one (Florence) is an average woman in her early twenties. She is generally compassionate and nice, and prides herself in her high morals. These high morals give her a sense of elitism that makes it difficult for her to change her views. Having a different point of view from her's can cause her to become cruel and condescending. Florence's story goes along the lines of "she becomes a vampire and the morals she based her entire identity around get a big kick in the teeth." The second one (Johanna) is the above character's girlfriend! She is charismatic and playful character. She has very few morals, and is definitely not above lying and manipulating to get the things she wants. In the beginning of the story, she is in an established relationship with Florence that she is constantly lying through. Jo's role is to end up causing the destruction of another vital part of Florence's identity, which is their relationship together. You certainly don't have to critique both of them, I'd be happy with whatever input.