I've always been one that thinks characters make the story and so when I had an idea for something I wanted to write most of the plot was fueled by the thoughts and actions of the main character. Well the project I'm planning out is actually a comic that will be a joint effort between me and my sister. She's doing illustration and I'm doing writing. It's about the transformation of a man into an insane murderer. He lives with his best friend in an apartment. Here are the main plot points that happen in the story: Before the kill The MC ponders what it would be like to kill He starts planning a kill for fun, nothing very serious He gains an obsession with blood He forces himself into a mental preparation state He realized the power feeling he gets from thinking about it He sees everyone as a potential victim He thinks he's the only murderer who knows what he's doing He realizes what religion means to him He harbors a deep hatred for all other criminals He starts having bouts of hatred towards himself He has one last sane glimpse at the world and decides to redeem himself The feeling of redemption is overpowered by his need to kill He becomes very angry all the time His days are filled with constant images and thoughts of violence and death The actual killing He sets his mind on his victim All of his energy and thoughts go toward blindly following his plan Just before he is shaky and worries about his strength An incredible rage overtakes him When he does kill the girl it is a flash and he doesn't even notice He becomes very frantic and runs away After the kill It seems strange to him that no one knows He tries to act casual He really wants to tell someone but can't He obsesses over it afterwards He becomes mad and paranoid with everyone which eventually leads to him attacking his best friend He is caught by the police Well I actually wrote the rough draft and gave it to my sister but she said the storyline went too fast and that the plot seemed limited considering it was basically all in his head. So I was wondering if anyone had any suggestions for how to flesh out the plot while keeping in the basic plot points.