Hi all. Can anyone tell me if this passage is in the proper dialogue format: Perry finishes putting the last cart away on the far left side of the parking lot, when a voice comes over his walkie talkie, "Restroom needs attendance, who is responding?" Perry slowly raises the walkie talkie to his lips and says, "I got it." He then proceeds to walk towards the main entrance.
Sabertooth22, Here is an article that focuses on dialogue, including proper punctuation. It will answer all of your questions. Article: Dialogue Basics Beyond that, Cogito has a good link too, if he stumbles across this thread. Terry
Often a colon would be used: Perry finishes putting the last cart away on the far left side of the parking lot, when a voice comes over his walkie talkie : "Restroom needs attendance, who is responding?"
Thanks Terry. Here's my article: He said, she said - Mechanics of Dialogue Terry, do you mind if I link to your article in my blog entry?