Example of what I wrote and how it was criticized: Pat came back to the house in time for dinner. He and Cari sat on the front porch after Cari had helped clean up after dinner. Pat told Cari, "Ben Rudner is a high muckety muck in Canton, and he offered me a job." Critique: HERE'S THAT HORRIBLE DIALOGUE PROBLEM AGAIN. IT IS SOOOO BAD. FROM NOW ON, IF YOU CANNOT FIND IT YOURSELF AND CORRECT IT BEFORE YOU SEND IT TO ME, I'M GOING TO HAVE TO FORCE TO TAKE THE PROBLEM ON BY YOURSELF! BY REFUSING TO EDIT ANY FURTHER OF YOUR SECTION SENT TO ME UNTIL YOU CORRECT THE ENTIRE PIECE AND SEND IT BACK TO ME CORRECTED. SORR TO GET TOUGH, BUT YOU HAVE TO BREAK THIS VERY BAD HABIT UNLESS YOU THINK IT ENHANCES YOUR CHANCES OF BEING PUBLISHED AND READ.