I've used similes in a couple of places and it makes the sentence feel like amateurish or like something written by a younger author (no offence intended to young authors - I simply mean that it makes it sound like an exercise in simile use). Here's an example. I experimented with other similes which communicated a similar thing but no matter what, it just sounds... bad. Are similes out of fashion? Or are they generally considered a less professional technique? Or is it that my similes are just not right? I'm considering just changing it for an adverb, but would appreciate feedback if possible.