1. Ellara Zemar

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    Ella's progress journal

    Discussion in 'Progress Journals' started by Ellara Zemar, Nov 17, 2018.

    I’ve had a not-so-productive period lately so I figured this might help in some ways (or at least it could be fun). My writing tends to be more spontaneous than structured which works great sometimes, but if I want to finish my WIP within my lifetime I have to put in some more work.


    So, I’m mainly writing just for fun, and to finally be able to put a finished work in my drawer.

    Or well.. who am I kidding? Of course I want to get published. With that said, I write the story just as I would want to read it, with no or little regard of any standards.

    Anyways, I unburied an old story of mine last year and have been working on it since. It’s a complicated story that got more characters and subplots than what’s healthy for me or future readers, but I'm too invested in it to get rid of any characters now.

    I might be too overconident and way out of my depth but I plan on making a trilogy out of it. Logically, I decided to start with the third and last part. My main reason was to see if the story could be made into the length of a novel without dragging it out. I also wanted to see if my concept of sidestories could work or not.

    (and sorry for bad English. It’s not my native language and I’m sure it shows the more I write. I appreciate any corrections though!)

    Some basic information:

    Name: [untitled] #1, #2 and #3 (more or less, I’ve got a list on bad names at least). There are plans on a #4 and a #0.5 but I try to keep my focus straight.

    Genre: Set in a distant future it inevitably got some sci-fi elements, but I’m not entirely sure about that. Let me get back to this question later.

    PoV: third person. Shifts between the characters.

    Word count so far:

    #1: 42K

    #2:
    33k

    #3:
    89k
     
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    So I put together a more detailed status for #3. I've laid out the chapters and divided it into five parts, mostly to keep some order in the messy state it currently is.

    Incomplete means that there's more to be added.
    1st draft usually means that I've written it but not done any editing.
    Fragments means that I've written a skeleton but it need some flesh to be comprehensive.

    So here we go:

    Prologue pt I (Mara)

    Words:
    2189 words
    Status: 1st draft, somewhat edited.
    Notes: I’m okay with it for now.


    Prologue pt II (Erik)

    Words:
    1720
    Status: 1st draft. Mostly fragments to be honest.
    Notes: I’m not entirely sure if it belongs here at all.



    Prologue pt III (Selene)
    Words:
    2230
    Status:
    1st draft



    (I know it’s not standard to have a prologue interspersed with the main story, but as the rest is divided into several parts I figured it could work. The idea is to put the light on the three leaders of the rebellious group ASA. They’ve been lurking around in the background in #2 but gets more spotlight in the third).
     
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    (The notes are mostly for myself to keep some track of progress).

    Chapter 1-3 (Victor)

    Words: 1590/1450/ 1930
    Status: Incomplete 1st draft. More or less unedited.
    Notes: Might need some more scenes.

    Interlude: AINL pt I
    Words:
    3600
    Status: incomplete 1st draft.
    Notes: Did I forget to mentions these interludes? Here's where it gets complicated, I guess. I'll explain in next comment.

    Chapter 4 (Samuel)

    Words: 3300
    Status: Somewhat edited 1st draft.
    Notes: OK for a first draft.


    Chapter 5 (Victor)

    Words: 1530
    Status: 1st draft, untouched.
    Notes: This chapter proved harder than I thought to write it. I think I'll eventually have to rewrite it from scratch.

    Overall comments: Rereading it, it doesn’t seem to be that bad. I’ve thought about adding some event in the first chapters.
     
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    Part 2:
    Interlude: AINL pt II (Nicki)

    Words:
    around 1000
    Status: 1st draft. Somewhat edited.
    Notes: Have around 900k to add with some foreshadowing.

    Chapter 6 (Nicki)

    Words: 560
    Status: 1st draft, untouched.
    Notes: I think this chapter rather belongs to the end of #2 than #3.


    Chapter 7 (Nicki)

    Words:
    920
    Status: 1st draft, untouched.
    Notes: An old draft, which doesn’t fit the timeline at all as it is right now. I'll have to rewrite it from scratch.


    Chapter 8 (Nicki)

    Words: 1960
    Status: 1st draft, somewhat edited. Actually, it’s okay for a first draft.
    Notes: I’m happy with some parts, but most of it needs to be rewritten.


    Chapter 9 (Samuel)

    Words: 1760
    Status: Incomplete,
    Notes: A late addition but it solves an annoying plothole nicely. Might have to divide into two later.


    Chapter 10 (Victor and/or Rob)

    Words: 1640
    Status: 1st draft, untouched. There’s some heavy editing to do.
    Notes: Not sure who's POV in this chapter.


    Chapter 11 (Nicki or Carl)

    Words: 3460
    Status: 1st draft, untouched.
    Notes: Oh man. This might be the first thing I wrote for #3. The main characters are together again so not sure who to focus on. Is it very annoying to jump between POV?

    Interlude: Yasmin

    Word:
    1700
    Status: 1st draft, untouched.
    Notes: -

    Chapter 12 ( Yasmin)

    Words: 2000
    Status: Fragments (more or less)
    Notes: This is a new side story which do have impact for the main characters, but it is a bit far off track. I’m still not sure if it will be a part of the story at all, but for now I leave it here.


    Comments: This part had more plothole than Star Wars, so there's a lot work to do.
     
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    Chapter 13 (Samuel)

    Words: 1210
    Status: I’ve got an outline, but the draft is in fragments.
    Notes: Another late added subplot but I have the chapter more or less figured out.


    Chapter 14 (Samuel)

    Words: 1200
    Status:1st draft, untouched. (More or less fragment, to be honest).
    Notes: Another plothole that needs to be adressed sooner or later. Been actively avoiding it so far.

    Interlude: AINL pt III

    Words:
    2370
    Status: 1st draft, more or less complete.
    Notes: (This is the core piece of the whole side story)

    Chapter 15 (Samuel)

    Words: 680
    Status: Will get edited out next round.


    Chapter 16 (Stella)

    Words: 300
    Status: incomplete 1st draft.
    Notes: Also known as the chapter that will connect


    Chapter 17 (Sam or Nicki?)

    Words: 1570
    Status: 1st draft. Makes sense, but there’s room for editing.
    Notes: Sam and Nicki gets together and might have their most defining dialogue here, but the scenes leading up to that is not well written.

    Interlude: AINL pt IV

    Words: 1160
    Status: 1st draft. Short, but complete.
    Notes: -

    Chapter 18 (Victor and/or Rob?)

    Words: 1520
    Status: 1st draft, untouched.
    Notes: Another old piece of writing. Fairly accurate to the storyline though.

    Interlude: Yasmin pt II
    Words:
    Status:
    Notes:
    I might try to fuse this with the AINL storyline as it is.


    Chapter 19 (Yasmin)

    Words: 1000
    Status: fragments.
    Notes: Not sure if four chapter is enough to make Yasmin's storyline justice.



    Chapter 20 (Victor)

    Words: 2400
    Status: 2nd draft (I think it would be fair to call it that as I rewrote it not long time ago).
    Notes: I really need to clarify who’s the POV here. It contains another key dialogue that ties up a thread that runs through the whole trilogy.




    Chapter 21 (Yasmin)

    Words: 1040
    Status: fragments.
    Notes: Yasmin’s story starts to tie up with the main story.


    All-in-all: This part is harder to write as all the main characters are together for the first time. Except for chapter 14 I at least got something to work with.
     
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    I guess I have scared away every reader here by now, but here we go: part 4

    Short version: it's a mess. The main characters go separate ways and I try to get their timeline to come together, but so far I'm just more confused than ever.

    Chapter 22 (Carl)

    Words: 4360
    Status: 1st draft, somewhat edited to be consistent.
    Notes: From here it gets just messy. First chapter after Elayna and Stella and Victor leaves. I think Yasmin's chapter needs to come before this as she has to break her news before Sam learns it.



    Chapter 23 (Yasmin)

    Words: (330)
    Status: Not written . (Think I got another draft somewhere else, buried in my computer.)
    Notes: Gods, this mess…



    Chapter 24 (Nicki)

    Words: 2400
    Status: 1st draft, incomplete.
    Notes: My personal favorite chapter. Nothing is as good as your protagonist finally reaching their goal.

    Interlude: AINL pt V (Carl and Victor)

    Words:
    900
    Status: 1st draft.
    Notes: Too short to be a interlude. Might need to rethink.

    Chapter 25 (Samuel, Carl)

    Words: 238
    Status: Incomplete and partly fragments.
    Notes: The never ending mess from chapter 22 and 23 continues...

    Interlude: AINL pt VI
    Words:
    500
    Status: Incomplete fragments.
    Notes: Should probably skip this.


    Chapter 26 (Victor)

    Words: 3040
    Status: Incomplete
    Notes: I haven't decided how to deal with this chapter. Victor needs help to get out of a situation and in the first draft his old mentor turns up. Spoiler: his mentor is dead and Victor is hallucinating (his brains creates the person he needs to take the right decision.



    Chapter 27 (Nicki?)

    Words: -
    Status: incomplete fragments.
    Notes: Another late additions that makes more sense than my original idea. I've got a very rough draft somewhere that's barely readable.



    Chapter 28

    Words: -
    Status: incomplete fragments.
    Notes: the climax of the story. Decided to make a major change which made the early draft more or less useless.


    Chapter 29 (Nicki, mostly)

    Words: 5530
    Status:
    partly written in first person’s view so far far from completed.
    Notes: Except for the fact that it's written in first persion view I like how it turned out. I like Nicki's voice and her feeelings gets so raw.

    Interlude: AINL last part

    Words: -
    Status:
    not written
    Notes: I plan to tie it together with the prologue of #1 but with another POV. Maybe to introvert.
     
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    The final part:

    Chapter 30 (Carl)


    Words: 1390
    Status: incomplete.
    Notes: The main event in this chapter is not even written.


    Chapter 31 (Stella)

    Words: 870

    Status: incomplete.

    Notes: Stella's ending. It depend on how much space I give her earlier I think. In someway the chapter that ties the main story to the prologue story.


    Chapter 32 (Nicki or Carl)

    Words: 2100

    Status: incomplete

    Notes: I have a hard time writing these last chapters. Nicki has changed a lot and is more or less rude and insensitive to everyone while she and Sam try to figure out their relations. And Tom bascially disappears for a while?



    Chapter 33 (Nicki)

    Words: 1390
    Status: 1st draft
    Notes: another confusing chapter that makes some jumps in time apparently. Poor Nicki gets to her lowest point. I still have to find out the point where she comes around again.



    Chapter 34 (Samuel)

    Words: 550
    Notes: The end of the story for Yasmin and Sam.



    Chapter 35 (Sam or Carl)

    Words: 700
    Notes: Would fit better as an epilogue.


    Chapter 36 (Ari)

    Words: 2230
    Status: currently working on a better version.
    Notes: The end for Nicki. Some jumps in time which I'm not sure works (mostly due to the whereabouts of Tom).

    And that's all.
     
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    Not a productive week at all. I've written around 2000 words, but they will not even make it into the first draft.
     
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    So another update: I've rewritten some key scenes in the 3rd part. It's better and more consistent than before but still not great.

    (On another note I think I found the Ending, or at least an ending I could see works.)

    I will dive into my poorly structured heap of writing and update my draft (and hopefully clean up my writing).
     
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