I finished the second draft of my first short story recently. I handed it out to some friends and family and got pretty positive remarks. I showed it to my girlfriend, who reads a lot and has taken a short story class before. She's of the opinion that my dialogue goes on too long and that I need to break it up with some action. I have plenty of beats in there (I don't go eight sentences without a little bit of action) but I don't like the idea of arbitrarily putting in description between every ten lines of dialogue. I read through it again and counted the lines of dialogue. I start with a paragraph of description, then one of interior monologue, then I go 15 lines of dialogue (with 4 beats) before I go back to a paragraph of action. Then I go back to 10 lines of dialogue (with 2 or three beats) before I go to another action paragraph. This is the second time she's said this about a piece of my writing (once in a first chapter of a novel I wrote too). She said she loved both pieces, that it was just a piece of constructive criticism. I still find it frustrating because I feel writers like Ernest Hemingway and Scott Fitzgerald write extended dialogue scenes with minimal action/description and it's an okay way to write. But I'm accepting to change my ways if I'm in the wrong. I just want more opinions on the matter in case I'm trying to change my style and hurt my writing by chopping up my dialogue with more description. She also says that I need to break up my description with dialogue. That I get into two different mindsets and I go off on three or four paragraphs of action and description before I go back to dialogue and I need to mix them up a little. I think that might be good advice but again I'm not sure. Another thing is that I've been reading a lot of Hemingway recently. As I'm an early writer I haven't really found my "voice" yet, so I'm still writing like a parody of whoever I'm reading. I used to write very poetic description (as most beginners do) but I tried to keep my description very stripped back and tried to do more interior monologue and description in line with my character. Just a little more insight into how I'm trying to write, in case this is a common problem. So what do you guys think? Do I need to change my ways or is she advising me on her personal taste. I'm not sure if I want to post my story here, just because some time in the future, a few years, when I'm a better writer I might want to try and tone it up and make it publishable.