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  1. Torana

    Torana Contributor Contributor

    Mar 13, 2007
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    Gannon and SisterShirk, joint contest winners.

    Discussion in 'Monthly Poetry Contest Archives' started by Torana, Jul 6, 2009.

    Poetry Contest

    This week's theme (courtesy of red matrix) is: Dumpster Diving

    Joint winners Gannon and SisterShirk.

    Patience - Gannon

    Amidst dancing dust,
    slick synthesised-bloom,
    marked mannequin-parts and twice-broken hearts,
    with some disembowelled former-Christmas-must,
    your sunken gem drowns in seas of costume.

    Amongst a wood-wormed world of nowhere-gates,
    warped oak-beams,
    gilt cornice and undone seams,
    with the last, small shred of brother-come-good,
    your soaked, second-place star smoulders,
    and waits.

    The Pear - SisterShirk

    “Today we are pirates” says father to son
    “We’re searching for treasure! Now won’t that be fun?”

    An uncertain smile with an uncertain grin
    Gives son to his father -adventure begins-

    “Now see here, first mate, I’ll show you the trick
    You reach down in here and give it a flick”

    The father’s great arms stretched way down inside
    And moved the large pieces of garbage aside

    “There now, you see? This green thing’s our ship!
    Climb up inside, careful, don’t slip…”

    A little blue coat, with a little blue boy,
    Jumped into his ship and shouted with joy,

    “Look, Dad, just look! Just look over there!
    Whole, ripe, uneaten, a beautiful pear!”
  2. Palmer

    Palmer New Member

    Jul 9, 2008
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    My, my, Gannon's poetry is always something else. Only from him do I get to read poems that really make me delve. I'll have to admit that I always need an online dictionary open when reading his poems, and only then do realize how really well-written they are. What I've seen is that he always packs a punch with compact, two-stanza poems. This one in particular made use of my ability to make lucid images with my imagination. It actually took me three times to read to understand it fully. At first, it just seemed like a pile of deep words consolidated to form some rubble. Then I read about the meaning of some words, still a little nonsensical to me. Then I remember what the theme is and read it for the third time to see it all clearly. I interpret it in a sense that these discarded trinkets are more valuable than they should be, and that a star sparkles buried with them or something. Kudos with this one! :3 I'll give this a Chaucer-.

    SisterShirk's "The Pear" was a good piece of fun. I'm an avid pirate enthusiast on the net, i.e. the kind that likes to speak in pirate every so often. This one was a refreshment to complement Gannon's poem. I'm easily "bought" by its simplicity. I can see that both of these poems share the quality that edifies supposedly ordinary objects. Magnifique! I rate this, a William Wordsworth+.
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  3. Gannon

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    Jan 15, 2007
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    Manchester, England
    Congratulations to SisterShirk, who garnered my vote - a fine piece, which appeals to the reader in its playfulness. And kind thanks to Palmer, whose unique scoring method of comparison makes me smile. Here's to the next contest.
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