First let me introduce my self, I am in my senior year, eighteen years old, and while in the midst of a possible depression, I am applying to college. Now I do not know if this is the right place to ask for help on this sort of thing, but your feedback would be greatly appreciated. What I am asking of you is to read over my college essay and to critique it anyway you can. If you think it is terrible then tell me so, but also tell me why you think that. Here is my essay. It has a 500 word limit and should try and relflect who I am as a person. SORRY, I just realized that a college might see this and think I plagerized it. THANKS for the feedback.