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  1. Francis de Aguilar

    Francis de Aguilar Contributor Contributor

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    Query Letter Hook first or I am seeking...?

    Discussion in 'Query & Cover Letter Critique' started by Francis de Aguilar, Jan 7, 2018.

    I wonder what the consensus is on this?

    Start the query with

    Dear xxxxx

    I am seeking blah blah.......

    Or

    Having saved the human race from certain death, Archibald turned his attention to...
     
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    I would personally start off with something like:

    Dear xxxxxx​

    Knowing you represent "X Author" and are currently looking for "X Genre," I think my Novel, "Dave's Next American Classic" would be a good fit for you. It's 80,000 words long and .....​

    If you've met them at a writers conference, mention that, if they were recommended to you by a client, mention that as well. I'd basically do my best to show them that I've done my homework on them and wasn't just throwing random queries at them and wasting their time.
     
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    big soft moose An Admoostrator Staff Supporter Contributor Community Volunteer

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    I'm no expert but I'd say start with Dear.... I am seeking representation for ....... a xx thousand word ... F genre novel.

    Then next line

    Having saved the human race ....
     
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    Tenderiser Not a man or BayView

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    I'd always lead with 'I am seeking...'

    I've seen the opposite advice, but it makes no sense to me. If I were reading blurbs, I'd want to know the genre first to put it in context. And I can't imagine how irritating it must be to read a query, think 'Maybe I'll request this one!' get to the end and see that it's only 30,000 words and unsellable.

    My agent leads with a similar paragraph when she emails my manuscripts to publishers.
     
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    That makes sense.
     
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    Tenderiser Not a man or BayView

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    I just added a bit of info that occurred to me after I hit 'Post Reply', for what it's worth.
     
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