I submitted a memoir to a publisher and he responded with the following letter: “I read it and enjoyed it. Whether there is a commercial book there is another matter. It needs a bit more work, there's some repetition between the stories. Also it is written as a series of anecdotes and now that it's done probably would benefit from some work to give it more of a story arc. There isn't a lot of your home town’s history beyond your family and I wonder if an effort to sketch in the character of the town and the region might not be out of place since there has been so little in print. The town was booming for awhile with the mine, logging going full tilt and the cannery serving a healthy fishing fleet--all gone now. Maybe that is getting too far from your personal story but I think a bit of background would give the story more marketability. As it is, it is a well-written, sensitive slice of coastal life. And that is good. I could see some parts fitting into a future edition of our regional story collection. Anyway, congratulations on a nice piece of work.” So folks, how do I rewrite this 73,000 word to his satisfaction?