In general terms, my short story is about a girl who is passive and always goes along with her sister, even when she doesn't believe in what her sister is doing, or when it could lead to harm. But she rationalizes this, and believes deep down that if it really came down to it, for something very important, she could stand up to her sister. The resolution of the story comes when she realizes, and finally admits to herself, that she can't stand up to her sister and never will be able to. My initial version, a lot of this is subtext. The reader is meant to piece this together and realize the significance of it vis a vis the character. I had someone read it, and he thought it was unclear. He didn't pick up on this transformation of the sister as being important. I tried revising, and basically presented the information more forcefully via internal monologue. The younger sister (the POV character) is presenting her state of mind more clearly in this way. Problem is, I think it's too forced. It's not as bad as "Now she realized she'd never be able to stand up to her sister and she'd only been fooling herself," but it's in the cab and on its way to that ballpark. What do you lot prefer when it comes to this sort of thing? Leave it for the perceptive reader to make the connection, or make the point of the story more overt?