Skip to post 9 for changes On to post 17 for the newest Below is an attempt at a query letter for my latest disaster. While it isn't present, assume there will be a closing paragraph touting the reasons I'm contacting the specific agent. I’m seeking representation for Shabin, an 82,000-word young adult novel set in the far future. The universe is teeming with life, but so far the only sign of another sentient species comes from the Herodians who died out long ago. Born on planet Rhime, seventeen-year-old Jason Shabin is the heir to a corporate owned and operated world. For hundreds of years, his family has been using their genetically altered DNA to manipulate people with an unusual psychic form of communication. The original patriarch slipped portions of Herodian DNA into the family line. His grandfather used the power to buy the planet and create an empire. His unstable biomechanical father wields it to crush the competition and expand profits. Jason wanders his solitary life manipulating the serving girls. When his father, the Emperor murders Jason’s uncle, he panics. Fearing he’s next, Jason convinces cargo pilot Sparrow to take him off the planet. Jason had always known he enjoyed the protection of the empire and lived a sheltered life, but he didn’t realize just how dangerous things would become without the Imperial Guard at his side. Thieves quickly steal a sample of his secret DNA. Jason must cross galaxies using the Mirre to track down the thieves before they can create more people with the ability. When he finds out who is behind the theft, Jason needs to take responsibility and bluff his way to stopping an interplanetary war. Any suggestions? Comments? Random meanderings?