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    I have a problem with my plot? I put my question at the end of the post.

    Discussion in 'Plot Development' started by thisisyourend, Dec 1, 2017.


    • 1895, Yilvoxe goes to an unknown shop and ask a man about the cure which he knows, receives a transfusion.

    • Yilvoxe wakes up in a dark room and sees her mother soaked in blood holding a baby and both burn when her mother touches her and falls back to sleep again.

    • Yilvoxe wakes up again in the city Yahridge in a rundown building. She meets a woman who almost kills her but she prevails. Outside the building she sees a floating door and goes in.

    • Yilvoxe is in a field of red roses in a foggy scenery with floating islands connected by rickety bridges. She goes to a house on one and meets Kale who gives her two revolvers, blade and alchemy. Kale explains the god of the world Cortevel (god of alchemy) and that there are three classes to the magic system alchemy. Yilvoxe leaves.

    • Yilvoxe is in a alleyway and walks onto a street meets a man through window that tells her that their is a rebellion, Ben and the common man vs the pope like figure of the city James and his soldiers. He tells her that if anyone knows anything about cures it's the church and a location they work at which is hidden. Only people with an invitation can enter the place. To find Ben he knows a man named Jules who knows Ben and gives direction to his home.

    • Yilvoxe goes to his home and confronts two church soldiers testing out her new powers. She kills both and meets Jules who takes her to one of Ben’s hideout. At the hideout she meets Ben and tells her that if she wants the invitation she will first need to get some weapons from Troy to help in his rebellion. He has one of his men take her to Troy’s shop.

    • Backstory: Yilvoxe at age 16 lived on the streets and was rescued by a woman named Susan. She's giving a warm bed and food but only if she joins her gang which she accepts. Her first job is to go with another gang member, Virginia to get some money Alexandra owes. They fight against her men and Virginia kills her and gets a key to her safe but is shot. Yilvove takes her to a doctor.

    • At the shop she hears a cry of a baby which leads her to a dead Troy. She sees a mirror which makes her blackout.

    • Backstory: James is a scientist with her friend Elizabeth and other scientist in coastal sity Garrigal. They were told of a strange creature killed by fisherman on the beach. They take the creature back to their lab and the scientist find it to have three blood types mostly made up of salt, mercury, sulfur. They test the bloods and find that when it touches their skin it gives powers. At the end of their day of work they go home except Elizabeth and James who decide to call the bloods alchemy based on the three primes.

    • Backstory: A week later one of the scientist thinks because one of the bloods is salt and gave powers then it should be consumable. They test the theory and it works. They decide to sell alchemy to the public and find that the creature still produces blood even after death. James at his home the end of the day goes to bed and has a dream about meeting Cortevel who tells the creature they found was its brother. Cortevel tells him that their are emerald tablets at a foot of a tree on a hill and that he will be able to translate them. The next day James wakes up and finds the emerald tablets takes them back to work. Him and 9 other people also had a similar dream meeting Cortevel. He translates them and all the scientist think he should lead the city into a new age. They show the creature to the public and sell the alchemy into capsules.

    • Yilvoxe is in the same room but no dead Troy and meets a woman who is his wife she tells her the church took Troy's weapons to the church of Yahridge and that Troy is missing. At the church she finds his stash and finds a recording by Troy. troy has is being hunted down by someone and needed to leave for his own skin. Yilvoxe sees another mirror and blacks out.

    • Backstory: Drake is a criminal who had to leave his home country to Yahridge and begin his business again. He runs a meat shop and meets Fabrin who sells alchemy. Drake buys alchemy from him. The next day Drake kills him and takes his identity. Fake Fabrin starts to sell alchemy at dead Fabrin’s shop. Months later James now leader of Yahridge finds out about fake Fabrin and tries to send him back to his country but escapes. Fake Fabrin sets his home on fire with the real Fabrin to fake his death. He hides a month later and takes the new name Benjamin Hunt.

    • Josephine, 18, is in a 1909 america she receives a letter from a mysterious man. Her mother rose takes it away from her. She talks to her mother at dinner and Rose tells her to not worry. The next day when Rose has gone out she takes the letter back and the letter tells her to meet a Eli at an address. Josephine meets Eli and he tells her that Rose isn't her mother and she has men who always been watching her. They are chased by said men and escaped into Eli’s hideout. She is given a necklace with a device that lets her travel the multiverse. One of Eli’s men finds them and almost kills Eli. Josephine ask if it’s true that Rose isn't her mother. He says no words but Josephine can tell it’s true. They escape into a parallel world.

    • The world therein is a 1975 atomic age america. Fallout 4 before fallout. They are separated. Rose is the president of this america. They meet back up and were captured by Rose’s men who bring them to Rose. They talk to Rose and Eli unlocks his handcuffs with a key he took off an officer. Eli is killed and one of the officers tries to stop Josephine by tasing her but her necklace short circuits and transported to a plane out of space and time where it's just white. Blackouts.

    • She wakes up not remembering the experience she's with Ben and his men. She was going to be killed but Josephine said she can help him in his rebellion. After helping him she is killed by Ben. Before she dies she witnesses visions of the future because of seeing all the world's in the plane, knowing of the future and past. She sees that her mother Yilvoxe will come to Yahridge to find something called the cure, kill Ben, and possibly stop his rebellion from being complete.

    • Yilvoxe is in a sunny world where there are floating buildings. She founds that this place is called New York City because the civil war was slaves vs the south and the slaves won led by Frederick Douglas, they made their own country in the sky. She reads a newspaper and finds out Troy is working at a university. She goes to the university and finds him but they have to run away from Wolf. They escape through a floating door into a world set in the year 3000. Troy explains that he’s looking for the philosopher's stone, who ever has it can destroy the multiverse. They go on a spaceship to mars finding the philosopher's stone there. Troy is stabbed by Wolf who is actually Yilvoxe from another world. They fight and our Yilvoxe wins, Troy gives her a tool that will put the stone into a pocket dimension. Troy dies but gives her a key to where he keeps all his weapons. The stash Yilvoxe found was 30% of all his weapons.

    • Back in Yahridge Yilvoxe fights with rebels as Yahridge is in civil war. They fight a mechanical dragon and James men. They make it to James home where Ben is and she finds he killed James and is almost killed by him because in this world Yilvoxe was killed before. Yilvoxe kills him and gets the invitation. She blacks out.

    • Yilvoxe is in a university and finds out the past of the school that Elizabeth ran the it and she met kale and they fell in love. She and her students were given the task to run tests on Bloody Mary who says she didn't have sex but got pregnant. They believe she will birth Cortevels child. Bloody Mary was put into a coma by her students and they later on began to loose their minds and all died. Yilvoxe finds Elizabeth and she tells her that if she wants to find the cure she has to go through her and she knows the baby has caused her to see things like every foreigner who comes looking for the cure. Yilvoxe kills her. She goes through a door and meets her mom. They talk about her killing herself because her illness. Her mother wants her to join her but Yilvoxe knows this is nothing more than the baby playing with her mind. She stabs her mother who is actually Bloody Mary and kills her killing the baby.

    • Yilvoxe goes through a door and meets Kale again who is the gatekeeper to the cure, they fight. She kills him and the cure shows itself as a tower. She goes in and she’s transported to when she first entered Yahridge.

    • Question: a problem I have is what could Josephine help Ben with in his rebellion?
     

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