Her cheeks were flushed from the cold, her hot tears streamed down them, warming them for a mere second, then instantly, nearly freezing on her reddened face. The cold air being forced into her lungs made her heart feel like it could explode, finally, after all this time, would this be it? Would her fragile heart, after all the years of pain and torment, finally burst as she ran through the dark woods, cold and alone, sobbing, no longer from pain and fear, but at the possibility of freedom? Could she make it? In her dreams sometimes she did, she would run, she would get to the field beyond the woods, circle around it heading north, remaining safe in the dark forest, and eventually come to the road. The road always represented freedom, it stretched as far as the eye could see in either direction. She had only seen it two times that she could recall in her short life, but she had heard them talk, she always listened, especially when they didn't know she could hear. The road led to other places, towns, cities, places where people didn't hide, places where people could help. The road led to everything. There were also the other dreams, the ones where they chased her through the woods, she wasn't fast enough, she wasn't big enough, it was too far, and they would find her, and drag her back, back to the hell, back to the life she tolerated because that is all she had ever known, but still would not accept. There was always a voice inside her that told her that this was not her place, there is something else out there, something better. This just couldn't be it. So she ran.
Yes, this is how I have chosen to introduce myself, and, No, I am not looking for critique, I am far more critical of anything I write than any editor would be. But. If you would like to critique have at it. It just seemed presumptuous to introduce myself with a blog. If this needs to be moved by the mods, then it will be moved.
Hello Disharmony, Welcome to the Writing Forums. All writing for review must be posted in the Review Room. If you have writing you simply wish to display, please post it in your member blog. However, posting your own work should not be the very first thing you do here. It is really worthwhile to see what other people have done to improve their writing, and see if some of it applies to your writing as well. That is part of why we require members to review other members' work before posting their own for review. On the other hand, there are no restrictions, other than content and copyright rules, on showcasing your work in your member blog. If you haven't explored the site yet, you should probably do so soon. Newcomers often gravitate to the Lounge, the Word Games, or the Review Room, but there is much more to be discovered if you poke in the corners. Remember to check out our FAQ as well, and be sure to read through the forum rules, too, to avoid any misunderstandings or hurt feelings. Respect for one another is our principal mandate. As for the Review Room, new joiners often wonder why we do things a bit differently on this site than on other writing sites. We emphasize reviewing as a critical writing skill. Training your eye by reviewing other people's work helps you improve your own writing even before you present it for others to see. Therefore, we ask members to review other people's writing before posting work of their own. The Review Room forums on this site, therefore, are true workshops, not just a bulletin board for displaying your work (and on that note, please only post each item for review in one Review Room forum). See this post, Why Write Reviews Before Posting My Work? for more information. And while you're looking around, don't forget to check out our Weekly Short Story Contest and Weekly Poetry Contest. They actually run more than one week apiece, but any member may enter, and all members are urged to vote for their favorites. Enjoy your stay here, and have fun!
Welcome to the Forums, Disharmony. I've no doubt you'll find plenty of opportunity to write stuff as you journey through the site. Enjoy.
