Is their anything I can to do make it sound more natural? Cause other people are using that term to describe it. Here is a sample of a couple of scenes for example. It's a screenplay, in case you are wondering about the format. But the format changes when copying and pasting it here, so I made some adjustments, if that's okay. EXT. PARKING LOT, POLICE STATION -- DAY -- LATER CHALMERS (40s), leans against his car, having a snack while watching the police station. He's in a suit and tie, with his hair slicked back. He sees Manning opens the back door, and peaks out. He makes sure it's safe, and holds the door for Sheila. She comes out while rummaging through her purse. MANNING I don't think they would have taken anything-- Manning leads her to his car as Chalmers walks over and intercepts them. CHALMERS Excuse me, I'm John Wray's attorney, Jerry Chalmers. Manning becomes alert and leads Sheila to the car. CHALMERS I just want to ask you some questions about the case, that's all. MANNING We'll pass. SHEILA No, I'll answer. What is it? CHALMERS Okay, thanks. I just want to say I'm sorry for your ordeal. But did you say anything to the police? MANNING Nevermind what she told us. SHEILA No, nothing at all. CHALMERS I just need to know, because what the police know, could come up. (to Sheila) What are you going to say in court? MANNING (opens the car door for her) C'mon, let's get going. SHEILA (to Chalmers) I'm not going to say anything. She gets in and they drive off. CHALMERS Okay, thank you Ma'am. Chalmers walks back to his car, as Guy exits the police station, holding hands with MARGO. An attractive woman (late 20s), in fashionable dress. MARGOT They gave me the story and I'm covering it at the trial... Can I come over and pick up some things the night before? GUY Sure. I'm back on the case now. MARGOT C'mon, just tell me more about it. What do you think I started dating you for? GUY Well, as I recall... EXT. PLAZA -- DAY -- MONTHS EARLIER (FLASHBACK) Margo is walking down a pathway with a FEMALE FRIEND (30s), and she sees Guy, on the same bench. He tries to light a large cigar, but the lighter won't work. Margo stops walking, and grabs her friend, gently by the arm. MARGOT Hey, that guy is cute. Check him out. FRIEND Well go get him, tiger. MARGOT Yeah, right. FRIEND Why not? Just go talk to him. MARGOT And say what? Guy looks up at her, and she turns away. FRIEND You see? You're going in... Just put your ovaries where your mouth is and go for it! The friend pushes Margo, lightly -- Margo walks on down the path, away from him -- She stops, takes a deep breath, and walks over towards him looking shy, but trying to act confident. He sees her and she comes over and he stands up off the bench. She comes up to him and snatches his cigar out of his mouth, to him being surprised -- MARGOT Got a light? He is intrigued... GUY Yeah, sure. He lights it for her as she tries to smoke it but inhales it and coughs... He sees that she is inhaling, and is amused. MARGOT (coughing) Not bad. She takes another inhale and coughs again. GUY (smirks and shakes his head) It's usually not until after a woman has experienced me, that she takes up smoking. But I'm not surprised. MARGOT (in disbelief) Oh really? Guy nods. She steps closer and tries to stare him down -- MARGOT Wanna bet? They look at each other in attraction... EXT. STREET -- DAY (BACK TO PRESENT DAY) Margo lights herself cigar, inhaling it, no problem -- MARGOT (to Guy) Well, you were right about one thing. They smile as he puts her arm around her and they walk off. GUY You'd have to leave me if you'd wanted to quit. What can I do to make the dialogue better and less on the nose? Thanks for reading and thanks for the advice .