I had to go to another forurm, because no one wanted to write a review for my revised chapter one of Amanda's Lament here on Writing Forums. But anyway, I wrote a scene that I thought was awesome, but it turns out it's been done and I sound like a copycat writer. I was wondering, correct me if I'm wrong, if I reword this scene, would it be different? And how can I reword it without copying it? Here's the scene from my verison The first time I met him it was dark. He stood there stoically in a way that sent shivers up and down my spine. He looked at me and whispered, “A storm is coming. You better be ready.” I looked at him surprised. “May I help you?” “You better be ready for it,” he whispered as he smiled at me. His smile was deep, dark and mysterious. I felt my heart beat faster as I looked at him. I basically whispered, “Who are you?” “Let’s just say I’m a friend.” He turned and started to walk away. “You know I don’t need anymore friends.” “I didn’t say I was yours.” Here's the scene from Buffy's pilot episode taken from an unofficial transcript on twiztv.com: Angel: Don't turn your back on this. (tosses her the box) You've gotta be ready. Buffy: What for? Angel: For the Harvest. Buffy: Who are you? Angel: Let's just say... I'm a friend. (starts to leave) Buffy: Yeah, well, maybe I don't want a friend. Angel: (turns back) I didn't say I was yours. Does anyone have any advice for me on how I should reword this? I'm kind of stumped on it. I'm trying to reword it, but it doesn't feel right as I go along. So any ideas anyone?