does this sentence make any sence, can your pride get broke, i was thinking along the line's of getting your feeling hurt, you really cant physicaly hurt feeling, just a saying, so does this work or is it dumb. Laying there for a second, he slowly did a self diagnosis. A quick conformation determined nothing was broke but his pride. is that ok or ?????? thank you all jim
Now it makes sense. PS: If that same sort of sentence was put into dialogue, "nothing was broke" would be more acceptable I guess, so long as the character always makes use of such colloquial language.
Much depends on whether you mean the fellow's pride was temporarily wounded (the common expression), or whether his pride (ie spirit) was broken. If I might, however, there are a few small things I would point out about the sentences you posted. 1. He is checking himself, ergo it is necessarily a self-diagnosis; so diagnosis on its own will do. 2. Laying there for a second, he slowly did a self diagnosis. A quick conformation determined nothing was broke but his pride. Either he was slow or he was quick, but these two words do not sit well together in such close proximity. 3. A quick conformation determined... a. Was this a typographical error: conformation for confirmation? b. I believe the word examination would work better, in any case. An examination could determine whether there was damage; a confirmation is already proven so wouldn't need to be determined. Just my two penn'worth.
Broke is non-standard, but it can be used as regional dialect, so it depends on who your narrator is. If the narrator is not in character --is you, the author, generally, standard verb endings would be used (broken).
should be 'confirmation' not 'conformation'... but even the proper word doesn't work well in that context... and it has to be 'lying' not 'laying' unless he's laying an egg ;-)... plus, how can he do anything slowly in a second?... then, pride can be injured, but not really broken... here's a better, more sense-making version:
