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  1. Kirill

    Kirill New Member

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    Longline for a nonexistent fantasy movie in Slavic setting

    Discussion in 'Plot Development' started by Kirill, Aug 30, 2019.

    Hello, everyone! Sorry to bother you. I want to conduct a little movie poll) How do you like this longline for nonexistent movie?)


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    Where the fairy-tale ends

    Longline:

    The fictional Slavic country lives side by side with ancient mythical creatures such as mermaids, сynocephalys (werewolfs), domovoys (ghosts), and others, driven into the ghetto. When a group of such creatures raids a warehouse with forbidden magical things, a violent detective from the crimes of mythical creatures department and his companion, a staff сynocephaly, have to undertake an investigation.


    Thank you for participation! Have a good day!
     
  2. Kallisto

    Kallisto Ruler of the world... somewhere... Contributor

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    Ghetto would not be a term used in ye olden days.
     
  3. Cdn Writer

    Cdn Writer Senior Member

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    Really? I thought the Jewish people's specifically requested a section of the city from the local government, where they would manage everything and this was titled a "ghetto"? Back then, it was not a negative thing as in a " poor" community. It was just an insular community of peoples with its own culture, tradition, and laws.

    Am I wrong?
     
  4. Kallisto

    Kallisto Ruler of the world... somewhere... Contributor

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    No, you just spouted something completely irrelevant, that's all. To be fair, I may not have made my point very well. And that was because I did not ask the right question. What time period are you imaging in your head? If you're imagining the era of the Vikings (which I thought for some reason) then you wouldn't put that term in there. If you're imagining Victoria times and beyond, then yes, it would be appropriate.
     
  5. GrJs

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    The thing you're writing is called a Logline, only one n. It's long. Generally a logline isn't over 30 words and it is the plot condensed into the most concise and accurate wording.

    So for yours a better one would be:

    When a group of mystical creatures raid a warehouse full of forbidden magical item, a violent detective must investigate before (insert your antagonists goal here)

    Or

    Violent detective (insert name) must race against time to recover stolen magical artefacts after they're stolen from a government lockbox.

    For comparison:
    The fictional Slavic country lives side by side with ancient mythical creatures such as mermaids, сynocephalys (werewolfs), domovoys (ghosts), and others, driven into the ghetto. When a group of such creatures raids a warehouse with forbidden magical things, a violent detective from the crimes of mythical creatures department and his companion, a staff сynocephaly, have to undertake an investigation.

    What you need in your logline is your protagonist, your protagonists goal, the conflict, your antagonist. The antagonist isn't strictly necessary as you can see from the example above but if your story is focused on a protagonist/antagonist fight rather than another goal, as yours is, then you need to have them in there.

    You don't need back story, you don't need world building. It's all about the characters, main goal and main conflict.


    Forgot to answer your question though :p. Totally would see a movie with this premise.
     
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    big soft moose The Moderating Moose Staff Supporter Contributor Community Volunteer

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    The term originates from the Jewish Cannaregio Ghetto in Venice instituted in 1516, where Jews were forced to live by the Venetian government, so by and large it has always been a negative thing, not one requested through choice

    on point the the term ghetto was not used prior to 1516, although similar restrictive areas were used further back into history - of course in a fantasy setting any word can be used at any time since we are dealing with a made up world or at the very least alternate timelines/settings

    there is some merit in using terms easily understood by a modern readership, particularly as you are writing in English, not the language actually used at the time.place you are describing
     
  7. matwoolf

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    'Ghetto' can be used in all sorts of ways.

    I would despair somewhat if after writing 'the gated community was a ghetto of snow-eagles and face-lifts...' I then had to tag the expression because my readership had a vocabulary of 500 words.

    The same term could equally be applied to your stone age epic tale with the neanderthals reduced to the caves up the high end of the cliffs...

    ...or low end, maybe..
     
  8. Kirill

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    Thank you for advice and answer! You been really helpful!
     
  9. Kevin Teichman

    Kevin Teichman Active Member

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    I would watch it!

    Kirill, do you speak Russian?
     
  10. Kirill

    Kirill New Member

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    Yes, I'm) Did you guess it by my poor English? :D
     
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    Kevin Teichman Active Member

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    No, by your name! I know a famous Russian lifter named Kirill Sarychev. I’m also learning Russian.

    Привет! Как дела?
     
  12. Kirill

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    Неплохо! Спасибо, что спросил)
     

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