Moose's progress journal

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  1. Millyme11

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    Perhaps you could let your creative refill come up with a new idea/plot/outline whilst you are finishing your other projects. That way by the time you finish one, another will be ready for you to start.

    I know it's not that easy, but I hope that you can one day achieve your goals :)
     
  2. big soft moose

    big soft moose All killer, no filler. Contributor Community Volunteer

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    I tend to find that i refill the creative font doing other things - running, walking the dog, driving, foruming, reading the news etc...
     
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    Sounds like a great way of getting motivated :)
     
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    Halfway through Chpt 5 of TDS Wc 10537
     
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    If you need a beta reader for TDS, let me know :D
     
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    big soft moose All killer, no filler. Contributor Community Volunteer

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    It will be a long while til its ready to beta ... you are welcome to alpha read if you want ( the difference being that an alpha reads as the writer goes along and critiques structure, plot etc without worrying too much about spag ... the beta reads once the manuscript is complete).

    Either way i'll warn you now that there is a lot of sex, a lot of violence, and a lot of bad language ... in the first five chapters Dusty, the MMC (who is the Pov character) has shot four hitmen dead on a london street, had steamy shower sex with Elin (the FMC,) joined the mile high club again with the FMC, had a fight with three bikers in a parking lot including killing one and gouging out another's eye with his car key, subsequently killed five more bikers three with his car and two by gunfire, and had a threesome with the FMC and another female character.

    In the next chapter they take out the remaining bikers up close and personal with knives and gunfire, then future chapters move on to rescuing Aldo (the other MMC) from the 'treatment camp, finding his husband Joe who is currently in the wind, and then escaping from the states...

    This one is not for the faint hearted...
     
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    Chpt 5 of TDS complete Wc10810
     
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    Well I'm up for the challenge if you need me. I don't mind reading it as alpha or beta, I don't mind spag :)

    That way I can help with feedback if you have certain questions you want answering about your manuscript. Just let me know :)
     
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    Halfway through chapter 6 wc 11958
     
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    Cool when i get to the end of Chpt 6 I'll send you the MS so far, and you can let me know what you think
     
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    Great! I look forward to it :D
     
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    Chpt 6 finished wc 12299
     
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    It's impressive and inspiring to read about your progression. Keep it up!
     
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    Halfway through chpt 7 WC 13459. Originally this chapter opened with a super hot sex scene between Dusty and Mary Beth, however reflecting on it it doesn't really work for her character, plus Dusty is beginning to follow the over used James Bond trope of bedding every woman who crosses his path. So major rethink here, cut the sex scene and instead put a much more tender scene between them with no sex or sexual intention.
     
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    Have you considered a scene where they watch 'cute kittens' videos on Youtube? James Bond never did that with a woman ;)
     
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    Yeah! Write everyday!

    Redundant sex scene, hm? How about Dusty and Mary both play up that they want to have sex, and get all touchy, but then they both figure out that they are both putting on a show for the other, to be all tough'n shit. They have a good laugh, joke about fakeness, or humanity, or whatever the theme of your book is, and just sit and clean guns, or watch porn for fun instead?
     
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    Dusty already has Elin along for the ahem ride.... getting involved with Mary too would complicate things... and while complication is good, that's only true if its relevant and this is a thriller , not a touchy feely examination of Dusty's love life
     
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    I think you've made a good decision there. Would love to see Mary involved in one of the fight scenes though :D

    Let me know how it goes! :)
     
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    I have contemplated a complete rewrite to ditch Elin as a major character and just have Mary Beth as the FMC ... that would make it quite different a book though, and I'd also have to rework the scenes before he meets MB where i've used dialogue with Elin to convey scene setting...

    One option might be to introduce MB earlier ... like maybe she called him for help after Aldo got detained, but then the fight with the bikers would have to be different.. and meets him at the airport... hmm decisions decisions. I might re do chpt 1-6 then send them back to my alphas for a test of which works better

    A plus of that plan would be to give MB a much more active role in the fighting, and avoid the Jack Reacher syndome of the big tough man protecting the helpless female
     
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    While I'm personally partial to Elin :D thinking through your argument makes sense. I'd say try it: what do you have to loose?
     
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    Interesting idea. Although I do have a small soft spot for Elin at the end of chapter 6. But I have to say, I really do love Mary Beth! :D
     
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    I'm thinking i'll keep her in chapter 1 - but it doesn't really make sense that he'd take a principal on such a dangerous mission - may be he arranges other protection for her in the UK before he flies out. Then we can pick up her story in the last chapter, or in book 2 or whatever

    this is the issue with pantsing - you wind up completely screwing with the timeline :D
     
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    Now rewritten along these lines and sent to my Alpha's .. WC now 12638 ( I also editted out some info dumpy bits and addressed a few things picked up in crit)
     
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    Chpt 7 complete Wc 13067
     
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    Another scene added to chpt 7, now its really complete WC13460. Chpt 7 sent to my alphas

    Need some research before i start chpt 8
     
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