My edits look okay?

a 2%–7% annual savings

an industry with annual revenues of $150 million–$200 million

I think my edits above (for a business report) are much better than the originals below. Do you agree?

a 2%- to 7%-per-year savings

a $150 million- to $200 million-a-year industry

Thank you.

 

Both are easier to read the way you've written them. Your version of the second one might sound a little less compact and formal, but I still think it is better.

Also, I would probably clean it up a little further and write:

2-7 % annual savings
annual savings of 2-7 %​

and

an industry with annual revenues of $150-$200 million
an industry with revenues of $150-$200 million annually​

 

I'm thinking that $150–$200 million could cause a momentary miscue; the reader may interpret $150 as one hundred fifty dollars, even if for a millisecond.

I think the en-dash signals true fastidiousness. Lol.

 

Thanks, everyone—appreciated.

 

Thank you, Seven Crowns.