Hi, thanks so much for clicking. This is the sentence for which I need a phrase: "He intervened to settle an argument between another coach and his players that, when finished, infinitely improved the mood of …" I am writing a story about a basketball team and am looking for the ideal way to end this sentence which is almost done. My protagonist is a coach himself, which may or may not complicate wording. I would rather not settle on "the/his/that/their team," for each of which I have my reasons. Does anyone have viable alternatives for me? I am open to archaic and/or legal-like language. Thank you.
He intervened to settle an argument between another coach and his charges that, when finished, infinitely improved the mood of …" Would that tick the ‘archaic and/or legal-like language’? If it was just the ’the/his/that/their’ you wanted to avoid, nothing springs to mind right now. Edited to add: I shouldn’t read and reply whilst having lunch! Misunderstood what you were asking.
To be honest, I have problems with the sentence itself, too wordy, and why throw in "infinitely"? What does it add? But if you go with it, why not just end after the word "mood"? Or maybe just "cleared the air"?
To me, "both" implies two people. If it said "coach and his player," I'd go with that. But I feel like I need something more descriptive of the situation.
Yes, more precision. Either of those are suitable. But instead of using the word "both," do you have a good way to finish the phrase "of all those …" ??? Thanks.
I've got involved, embroiled, associated or connected... everyone involved all parties involved and for (lengthy) precision... each and every person embroiled in the dispute
