A few days ago my friend who has been reading what I have done of my novel so far, read parts of a chapter where quite a few of the characters are killed off. He told me how he was so shocked by it, and really liked it, but told me the deaths of those characters would have an even greater impact if they were more developed and had more time given to them in the story, which I was aware about, the problem is that I have been struggling to make those characters have the impact. My friend was not shocked so much by the fact that the characters died, because he had skipped chapters and knew little to nothing of those characters, it was more to do with how they died and the plot twists of the chapter that made him react the way he did. So I am looking for advice how to make this characters have some kind of impact on the reader, not just when they die, but in the chapters prior to their deaths. I have developed other characters in the story much better, but I seem to struggle with these characters. Two of them are dukes, Harrer'mont and Vormard, Harrer'mont being the best friend of the king who is deceived into killing him. Vormard knows the king but not so closely as Harrer'mont. Vormard has a daughter who is in her early twenties, called Rohbey. She is being forced into a marriage she is strongly opposed to, and feels she has no freedom in her life. Vormard also has a five year old son, and a wife, who both die as well. Harrer'mont has a son called Fillian who is in his twenties, and is in a loving relationship with Isaryn who is the son of the king. Both Fillian and Isaryn die as well. The last of the characters who die in this chapter is Liangela who is Harrer'mont's wife. Please know that I also know sometimes killing off characters who people have built a great bond with can sometimes make the reader give up if their character is killed. But what I am asking is what can I do with these characters to make the reader actually care about them? So far I have gone into more depth with Vormard's family. I cant figure what to really do with Rohbey other than her being a big whiner most of the time because she is not happy about her life, which I really want to change, whilst she remains in her circumstances, because the wedding never happens because she is killed before it. I have tried to show her expressing how much she loves her little brother. With Vormard I have written about him going on a diet because he is too fat, so he goes jogging with Rohbey and cant keep up, eventually getting a stitch before he passes out. He also tries dancing. That is pretty much all I have got so far, except that Rohbey might have found herself a man she actually loves, who is a farmer, but would this be too clichéd, being that she is a noble? With Harrer'mont I have got barely anything other than that him and the king hang out for a bit. What sort of activities or other forms of interaction could I write to make people care about Harrer'mont? And then there's Fillian and Isaryn, who all I have got so far is that the king and Harrer'mont don't like their sons spending time together, but neither of them are homophobic, and also that Fillian and Isaryn spend time out in the country side because they have not seen each other for quite some time, and come across a bunch of homophobic outlaws who begin to insult them both. Apart from all I have written above I have nothing else and have been stuck in this position for a long time. What could I do to improve and expand on the relationships between these character that will make the reader actually care about them? If you want to know more about the characters please ask Sorry I am not sure if this belongs in character development? Probably does though.