Thanks, for the advice guys! Still not sure which one I'll pick though- lol! I'm just going to keep writing. The stories not finished yet. Maybe I'll post it when it's done. I like to tinker and edit a little as I'm writing - and I tend to nit-pick every sentence. Some great rewrites - here - and some hilarious ones! It's actually a hard visual - because both lights include flames. And can sound as though they are referring to the other.
One person's overwrought is another person's flowing prose. There are plenty of writers who subscribe, myself included and I've said this before, that one, longer sentence flows better then two to three short, jarring sentences. Opinions are just that, opinions, and there is no right or wrong way to write it. Depends on the author's writing style.
