Hey, I am looking for opinions on the plot of my supernatural romance/action novel. The story revolves around a vampire who has risen to the position of crime lord in a small, but growing city in North Dakota by means of kidnapping, turning, and murdering humans visiting his city in order to manufacture a rare drug that is popular in the vampire community. For a while he is able to keep his second life a secret, while he attends college and attempts to keep up appearances of being happily settled in an arranged engagement in order to keep his parents in the dark. Then his childhood friend, a human, and at one point, the love of his life, turns up injured on his parents' doorstep on a night he was set to celebrate with his family. The main character concludes from this that someone was made aware of the connection between himself and the human girl, and that one of them or both of them is being watched by a member of the supernatural community. Knowing this, he decides to take the girl into hiding at one of his safe houses in order to protect her, but it soon becomes clear that his actions as a criminal are leading up to a war and he is faced with the decision of sacrificing with himself and everything he has worked to hide and to build in order to avoid a war and to save the girl he once -- and may continue -- to love. Thoughts?