Some of you seen the lack of clarity in some of my sample paragraphs. We have concluded that a major problem of mine is writing archaic constructions and focusing too much on rhythm before I have clarified my thoughts. But another problem I have is not being able to organize them. When I have something to write about that falls into a certain category, especially something I want to write about in a poetic way, I struggle to arrange my thoughts in a coherent fashion. So when I write my paragraphs, it looks like I am adding unnecessary information, when in reality I am cramming stuff in that belongs somewhere else. I need to figure out how to organize my thoughts correctly, so that when I write my paragraphs, they are clear and coherent, and I can play with syntax and combine the sentences in various way to change the rhythm without loosing anything. Does anyone have an idea of what I am talking about, and how I can correct it?