So, -to anyone reading this- A week or two after new years, I should have the workshop draft of this story done. Along with my normal Critique group, I am willing to let six readers of this site look at the workshop version. If you are interested, let me know, but a few things first. 1. It is written in Iambic Pentameter. 2. It is for Adults only. (If you are under the age of 18, or have your age hidden on the site, don't bother asking.) 3. Logline: A man struggles to solve Eillrill's Puzzle, which would grant him entry into Heaven, as his wife attempts to stop him in order to keep their family together. 4. I write Horror that has really strong Erotic undertones. - Things I want you to be looking for: 1. Things that don't make sense. 2. Things you'd want expanded on. 3. Use of Language. I'm not at the level of Robert Frost as he could make IP read like everyday prose (but I am getting there.) Point out spots that read 'forced.' 4. In my next story, what do you feel like I need to improve on the most?