What do you think about the plot so far? It is Cliche? Should I change the background of the main characters? What is the best title for it? Just need feedback and criticism. I'm planning to post the story on Wattpad once I wrote the first three chapters. There would be dual narratives from both Kala and Jace. A romance story about a Caucasian boy named Jace who is from the suburbs of New York and is 21. He has a drinking problem, smokes cigarettes, goes to the club every single night and is a player, but he has a gift for playing the guitar. To get out of his reckless behavior, his mother send him to Hilo, Hawaii for a month where his father is suddenly staying for vacation in the summer. Jace rarely talks or visit his father since his parents got a divorce before Jace turn thirteen. However while in Hawaii, Jace falls in love with a native Hawaiian girl named Kala. Kala's Story: Kala is 19 year old Native Hawaiian has been living in Hilo, Hawaii even since she was born. She goes to hula school to become a professional hula dancer and hula at the Hilo festivals. However when she is not at school, Kala has to babysit her younger siblings and take care of her grandmother who can't take care of herself since her mother is at work. Because of this, Kala hardly has any time to get out with her friends and find freedom for herself. She can't get over her father's death since he died in a unexpected accident not too long ago. She thinks her family fall apart even since his death. However, things change for her when she fall in love with Jace.