Project Journal: The Silver Shrike

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    Sure. But I was going for "which idea do you personally prefer?" here.
     
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    I did understand that. I just don't have anything to give that specific question. So I hoped I could give something else.
     
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    I started actually writing the sequel today. However, the prologue feels a little unnecessary, and I'm not really feeling the POV (a minor villain), so I've decided to cut it and just move on with Chapter 1 tomorrow.
     
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    Hit another wall today, mostly related to trying to figure out how to reintroduce the key elements of the world (the Cataclysm, the Affliction, the shatterlights, etc.) quickly but organically.

    Thankfully, I think my newest idea for how to start off Chapter 1 will lead to a breakthrough, so I'll give it a try tomorrow.
     
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    Completed the first scene of Chapter 1 today. About 1390 words.

    Once I knock out this first chapter, I think things will flow much more smoothly.
     
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    Restructured that scene to smooth out a few wrinkles. It flows much better now, I think.

    I also added about 250 words to the scene.
     
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    Got in 950 words and stopped right before my first fight scene.
     
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    I spent today reworking Augur's entire subplot and aiming to integrate it into the climax. All but one chapter of it takes place in Izar now, and her operations against the Lupos will provide a key piece of the puzzle that leads into a climax involving all four POVs.
     
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    Got through most of the fight scene and its bridging material today. 1542 words.

    I'm on schedule to wrap up Chapter 1 tomorrow.
     
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    Wrapped up the fight scene and the rest of the chapter. 862 words.

    Tomorrow I'll deal with the interlude, and perhaps the first scene of Chapter 2.
     
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    Knocked out the interlude and Chapter 2, Scene 1. Around 1350 words.
     
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    Since this sounds like a fantasy story, Hawthorn is organic, a better fit. Also it seems to lend to more drama in the action or spectrum of your world, if I'm making any sense.
     
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    forgot to look at dates
     
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    They look fine.

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    Thanks.

    I ended up keeping Kaya as Daybreak, but swapped a minor powered character over to the Hawthorn identity. While Hawthorn kinda fits the theme better, certain plot points made more sense if Kaya had Daybreak's power set.
     
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    Ah, good. I'll be happy to look at any excerpts! :)
     
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    Wrote scene two of Chapter 2 today, along with the second interlude. 856 words.
     
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    Wrote Chapter 3, Scene 1. 925 words.

    This one was like pulling teeth. It's Inspector Silvie Pamplone's introductory chapter, so that's probably due to a combination of trying to feel out her voice/character tics and balance audience sympathy for what's essentially a corrupt cop.
     
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    I decided to rewrite yesterday's scene, and I'm much happier with the result. 1210 words for the new version.
     
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    Storms made it tough to get much writing in safely, but I pushed 400 words into Ch. 3, Scene 2.
     
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    Wrote a little more after supper, bringing today's total to around 950 words. That puts me around half to two-thirds of the way through this scene.
     
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    Finished off Ch. 3, Scene 2 today. 1060 words.
     
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    I wrote probably 500 words today, coming at the scene from a couple angles, but ultimately I decided it wasn't necessary.

    I'll try to tackle the last scene of this chapter over the weekend.
     
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    Finished off the last scene of Chapter 3 today, then dealt with the next interlude. Probably around 1100 words today.
     
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    Took today off to get my bearings, since Ch. 3 chewed up so much time and energy. so I just edited and planned for Chapter 4. I'm hoping I can write Chapters 4 and 5 this week.

    I also plan to send a query to Hydra about the status of The Silver Shrike. Fingers crossed I get good news.
     
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