I've just had a reply from a mag I submitted to: 'I see in your covering letter you're a long time university teacher. This perhaps explains why yours is the cleanest and most logically set out short story manuscript we've read in a long time. But please remember that university writing is logical, emotions held in check. Your story, beautifully plotted though it is seems like it's bled white of all emotion. Please please go over this again. Forget behaving cool, James Bond--we want our emotions stirred and shaken! Exaggerate as much as you want--get the feeling for you hyperbole is what's called 'normal' for us folks. Look forward to a re-submission once you've dealt with this issue.' I'm sure they are right, but being a very logical person anyway I think I get impatient depicting characters with messy emotions! My kids told me to put myself into the character's shoes like a method actor, and get out of myself... Anyone got any other ideas how I can hype up the emotion?