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    Random sentence and impressions

    Discussion in 'Word Mechanics' started by NigellaStory88, Jan 12, 2018.

    Ok very simply, what do you think may be going on here in this sentence: "Maureen, Emily and Emma all had their arms around each other grinning."
     
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    They were in a group huddle—confirming one last time their cunning plan. A plan that'd knock their opponents (figuratively) out of the park.
     
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    I imagine them position in something like a rugby scrum or a football huddle, planning something mischievous. I'm not sure why, but the names give me the impression of older women (like The Golden Girls.)
     
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    Just a group of friends hanging out on a bench, or walking around a familiar place
    that they would meet up at for a length of time, doing something that makes them
    happy.

    Oh crap, are you writing the Tale of the Traveling Panties? :D
     
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    Luckily our writing is rarely based on one sentence. My impression is that I have know idea what's going on. I could guess, but I don't like to mix guessing games with writing. I would also rethink naming one character Emily and one Emma. They're probably a little too similar to be your best option.
     
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    Their arms are grinning? :D Apart from that, "they had their arms around each other" would make me imagine them in a circle, huddled together like players do in some sports.
     
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    It's VE Day in May 1945 and the three girls, all in their early 20s are in the centre of Piccadilly Circus to celebrate with thousands of other happy Londoners.
     
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    Yes just realised that now. What i can say about what they're doing in my mind anyway, is that the original intention is that these three women (Maureen, Emily And Audrey [renamed]) might just have been up to something fairly mischievous but as to what that is exactly, I'm not entirely sure.
     
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    Thats really great. I like that image.
     
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    I'm a little late in the game, but to me it sounds like someone's telling Maureen that Emily and Emma are the ones giggling. I had to read it twice because the word "all" suggests otherwise. But this is quoted, so instinctively that made me think someone was talking. A comma after "Emily" would've solved the initial confusion (that I get every time someone makes a list and leaves out the final comma . . .:rolleyes:) .
     
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    I have an gmage in my head about 3 teenage girls who are either planning something funny/nasty like a secret Party etc or are just gossiping about someone.
     
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    It's ambiguous, in part due to the lack of a comma after Emily. If all three have their arms around one another, I'd put the comma in.
     

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