Most people are extremely bad writers. What's even worse is they think they are good and simply different or original. Yet in the critique section, I see nothing different or original; the mistakes are all the same and the same as all amature writers have always made. If you want to be a writer, you're going to have to go to school and learn how to write. If you want anyone to read what you write, you're going to have to learn the classical and concrete steps that are required to make a story--any story--work. Here are the most common mistakes I see (Perhaps you'd like to add to my list in your comments.): 1. Vagueness in place of suspense. 2. Stilted dialog instead of realistic dialog. 3. Bad gramar, punctuation and very bad English composition. 4. Characters with no more depth than the name the writer gives them. 5. Lack of a moral to the story. 6. Lack of pithy narration. 7. Posting unedited work. 8. Unrealistic motivations or no motivations for characters' actions. Here's some unsolicited advice to make you angry: Good writers go to college, read books with a critical eye, and live wide lives. Go and do likewise. We all pretend to be writers; there's nothing wrong with that. What makes a bad writer is the person who's reached his goal with the pretense.