1. Timothy X

    Timothy X New Member

    Joined:
    Mar 3, 2017
    Messages:
    3
    Likes Received:
    0
    Location:
    Neverland

    Rate my summary from 1 to 10

    Discussion in 'Plot Development' started by Timothy X, Mar 4, 2017.

    I've been working on a fiction novel (project TX) aimed towards the preteen/teen crowd. This is a one sentence summary of it:

    A group of genetically modified emissaries are sent back in time to prevent humanity's annihilation, only to age back as children and loose fragments of their memories.

    I don't have feelings so you can use your up-most honest opinions on it. Is it OK? Does it sound like something that might interest you? Does it sound familiar? Or does it sound like I just retyped a book that already exists? I personally think it doesn't sound original enough. I can give more info if you ask.
     
  2. Greenwood

    Greenwood Active Member

    Joined:
    Dec 10, 2014
    Messages:
    172
    Likes Received:
    134
    Location:
    Ruins of Old Aar
    Thinking back to when I was about 12 years old, this would definitely have interested me. GenMod, time-travel and the destruction of humanity are topics that pre-teens/teens can find just as interesting as adults. They shouldn't be underestimated, especially when it comes to their imagination. The fact that the MC's are now children would also speak to a pre-teen crowd, but be sure to stay in the roles of children. I wouldn't worry about originality here. Besides the fact that every story has already been done regardless of its contents, I think the wording is pretty tight. You might want to simplify it a bit though. "Genetically modified emissaries" and "humanity's annihilation" aren't words I'd expect in a pre-teen story. "Destruction of mankind" might be a better wording here. That could just be me though.
     
    Timothy X likes this.
  3. tajo

    tajo New Member

    Joined:
    Feb 22, 2017
    Messages:
    14
    Likes Received:
    3
    It's a tiny bit short. It doesn't really make sense that they go back as children.... does some sort of accident happen?
    "Only to go back as children." Is extremely vague, but maybe you are just trying not to expose too much of the plot?
    Maybe "Because of a freak accident, they go back as children."
     
  4. Timothy X

    Timothy X New Member

    Joined:
    Mar 3, 2017
    Messages:
    3
    Likes Received:
    0
    Location:
    Neverland
    Actually, that's the exact reason why they came back as kids. I am still working on how that will happen, though.
     
  5. jannert

    jannert Who? Whooo? Staff Supporter Contributor

    Joined:
    Mar 7, 2013
    Messages:
    17,208
    Likes Received:
    18,971
    Location:
    Scotland
    I was fine till I got to 'age back.' That doesn't quite make sense to me. Do you mean they return to the present as children? If so, that might be a clearer way to say it.

    Am I getting the picture correctly here?

     
  6. Timothy X

    Timothy X New Member

    Joined:
    Mar 3, 2017
    Messages:
    3
    Likes Received:
    0
    Location:
    Neverland
    I think I should reword it before the people get the wrong picture. Due to a malfunction time takes affect on them and they aged back as children when they went back in time. They were adults when they left their present time.
     

Share This Page

  1. This site uses cookies to help personalise content, tailor your experience and to keep you logged in if you register.
    By continuing to use this site, you are consenting to our use of cookies.
    Dismiss Notice